Monthly Archives: September 2008

Zain Bhikha – Allah Knows

When you feel all alone in this world
And there’s nobody to count your tears
Just remember, no matter where you are
Allah knows
Allah knows

When you are carrying a monster load
And you wonder how far you can go
With every step on that road that you take
Allah knows
Allah knows

CHORUS
No matter what, inside or out
There’s one thing of which there’s no doubt
Allah knows
Allah knows
And whatever lies in the heavens and the earth
Every star in this whole universe
Allah knows
Allah knows

When you find that special someone
Feel your whole life has barely begun
You can walk on the moon, shout it to everyone
Allah knows
Allah knows

When you gaze with love in your eyes
Catch a glimpse of paradise
And you see your child take the first breath of life
Allah knows
Allah knows

CHORUS

When you lose someone close to your heart
See your whole world fall apart
And you try to go on but it seems so hard
Allah knows
Allah knows

You see we all have a path to choose
Through the valleys and hills we go
With the ups and the downs, never fret never frown
Allah knows
Allah knows

CHORUS (x2)

Every grain of sand,
In every desert land, He knows.
Every shade of palm,
Every closed hand, He knows.
Every sparkling tear,
On every eyelash, He knows.
Every thought I have,
And every word I share, He knows.
Allah knows.

أحبك

أحبك

قلها أيها الجبان

قلها أيها الخائف الضعيف

ما بالك ترتجف

ما بال كلماتك تخرج مبعثرة

يالك من سخيف

إنها تحبك ألا ترى ذلك

لا يجب عليها أن تقلها

بإمكانك الشعور بقلبها يتهجى الكلمات

أرحها وأرحني

تعبت من انتظار اللحظة المناسبة

لقد مرت عدة لحظات

أحبك

اختنقت الكلمة وهي مسجونة في صدرك

أطلق سراحها لأجلي

أقنعني إذاً وأخبرني

ما سبب ترددك ؟

ما سبب كتمك مشاعر قد تتسبب في قتلي؟

في عينيها بحر

وتجرأت أنت على السباحة فيه

والآن أنت غريق

صدقني هي من ستسعدك

أعرفك جيداً

هي من أشعلت النار وهي من تستطيع إطفاء الحريق

“أحبك…

سامحيني على تأخرها

ويعلم الله أني وددت قولها منذ زمن بعيد

أحبك…

أنت الأولى والأخيرة

أنت أقرب إلي من حبل الوريد”

How to Write a Good Story

Again I say, I’m not a professional writer. I’m not even a published one. I never took any formal Creative Writing classes although I have been wanting to do that for a long time. Albeit all of that, a lot of people contact me asking me for general advice on how to write a story or a poem. Others send me their work requesting my help and input. Naturally, it gives me a sense of pride to see that others think of me as someone whose opinion matters. I try to take the task seriously but more often than not, I’m not that good as an instructor when it comes to writing. Anyhow, this is just an attempt to explain some basic rules that you should follow when you are writing a story. These are my own personal guidelines that I learned by reading countless fictional stories and scanning through creative writing lessons online.

- Obey the rules of grammar, punctuations and spelling! This is THE most common mistake in all the pieces of inexperienced writers. It pains my brain and my eyes when I see a story or a poem that could’ve been great if not for the shameful grammatical errors. Punctuations are very important and often neglected by many. They make the story easier to read and less confusing. Spelling mistakes are just a sign of laziness. Don’t you have a spelling checker?!

- Never use abbreviations. This is somewhat related to the previous rule but it had to be mentioned alone because the younger generation (speaking as if I’m old) tend to abbreviate everything! Remember, using 2 instead of to and 4 instead of for can only be done when you are texting someone.

- Maintain a consistent style and tone. If you are using the first person narrative format stick to it and don’t switch to other formats. If your story is basically a romantic one, keep it that way. Don’t insert some aliens, a sudden police car chase or make it overtly funny. Otherwise, you’ll lose the reader’s sense of romance and you’ll turn your story into an Indian movie.

- Don’t use adjectives and adverbs excessively. This is also a common mistake because many think it adds something to the writing when in fact it takes away from it. The hot blazing golden sun shined brightly over the blue lazy waters. Do you see what’s wrong with the previous sentence?

- Divide and conquer! Well, not exactly. If your story is long then it would be smart to divide it into multiple chapters. Each chapter should have a central theme or event. Each chapter should end in a way that makes the reader look forward to the following one. That what makes the reader finish a novel in one day instead of reading it on and off for a couple of weeks. Be careful not to overuse cliff hangers because they can get old.

- There must be action! By action I don’t mean cars flipping over and explosions. However, a story that has nothing but dialogue can get boring. The characters should move and go through multiple events that shape up the story. Of course, don’t over do it.

- The dialogue should be realistic and interesting. I admit that this is not one of my strengths. Your dialogue should be believable in the context of the story. It should sound normal and flow easily. You must keep clear who is saying what because it is very annoying for a reader when he or she gets mixed up.

- Keep vulgarity to a minimum. Don’t use cuss words unless you absolutely have to in order to get a point to the reader or if the character requires that. Describing love scenes can be tricky and becomes vulgar if you are not careful.

- Create complex characters. I can’t stress this enough. The difference between a good writer and a bad writer is most evident in their choice of characters for the story. Try to stay away from one dimensional characters such as the evil man who does nothing but bad things and the hero whose only goal is to save lives and be a good man! Humans are much more complex than that and you should make your characters multidimensional and as the reader flip through the pages, he gets to learn more about them and connects to them.

- Balance your descriptions. Describing anything too much can be irritating to the reader and describing too little can make the reader unable to imagine what is going on and subsequently disengage from the story. It’s a hard formula to master. Use details when you want the reader to feel intimate with the place and what is going on or when it’s an unusual place and the readers need further description. You can skip describing some major elements when you want the reader to picture the surroundings in their own way instead of being restrained by your view. There is nothing exactly right or wrong when it comes to this. It all depends on your personal taste.

- If you don’t have a plot, you don’t have a story. The plot is the most important component of any story. A good plot can make people read your story even if you didn’t abide by all the rules above! There’s nothing really to instruct here. It just needs to be interesting. It has to have the reader waiting to see how the characters develop, how the events play out and how everything comes together in the end. It’s best if you keep your ending unpredictable but don’t force it. It’s fine to have a predictable ending as long as the story itself makes you want to know how did it come to that particular ending.

- Once you’re done with your story, leave it aside. Hide it away in a drawer and forget about it for a couple of weeks or months then read it again. I assure you you’ll find many things that you want to change, mistakes you haven’t paid attention for, some weird contradictions, a confusing time line and such things that you can only spot once you have managed to get the story out of your head and read it as if you’re reading a new novel for the first time.

That is all I have in my mind right now. I hope this will benefit someone someday. The best of luck to all aspiring writers out there!

22222 and more!

My old blog has received 22222 hits a couple of weeks ago and I wanted to honor that in a post :P This place has received a little bit over 7000 hits so far which is rather remarkable especially when you consider its short lifespan. It’s very humbling and pleasing when you know that there are people who take the time to read what you write. Thank you all!

تحبني كثيراً

تحبني كثيراً

في صوتها لهفة

وفي مصافحتها دفء

وفي عينيها أمل

أتمنى أن أحبها

لو كان الأمر بيدي لفعلت

لكنها مجرد صديقة

لا أكثر ولا أقل

جميلة هي

من أخدع ؟ بل هي فائقة الجمال

ذكية وطموحة ورقيقة

لا أبالغ إن قلت كاملة والكمال لله

وقلبي غبي

يأبى أن يطيعني

ماذا يريد أكثر من ذلك ؟

أمن تعذبه وتشقيه هي ما يتمناه ؟

تعرفني جيداً

وتعرف أني لا أحبها كما تحبني

لكنها تتجاهل ذلك كله

وتقابلني للقهوة مساء كل أربعاء

نتحدث ونضحك سويةً

نتشارك أحلاماً ودموعاً

وقصصاً لا يعرفها غيرنا

ونفترق على وعد باللقاء

وسيأتي يوم تنسى موعدنا

ترحل فيه مع رجل آخر

وتتركني وحيداً للأبد

ولن ألوم غير نفسي

أحبتني كثيراً

ولو أني أحببتها قليلاً

فلربما كنا هنا معاً

سعيدين نتذكر كيف كنا بالأمس

Taraweeh Prayer

To those of you who don’t know what Taraweeh Prayer is, click here.

To me, Ramadan is associated with Taraweeh. It what comes to my mind when I think of Ramadan, right after fasting. It’s rather strange how people think TV and Food when they think of Ramadan. Anyhow, I believe it’s a big deal because well, we all have our share of sins during the entire year so Ramadan is your chance of counteracting that with some good deeds! It’s one month for God’s sake. You don’t need to waste this time at shopping malls and cafes. You have plenty of time to do that during the rest of the year. I’m not a religious person at all but a little bit of spirituality doesn’t hurt anyone. I injured my back over a week ago so I couldn’t go to Traweeh for the first few days which is upsetting because I really wanted to pray all of Traweeh this year. I didn’t want to use a chair for my own private reasons. Inshallah I get to go everyday for the rest of this month now that I’m better.

I don’t have a specific Mosque that I go to every night because I actually like variations so I end up praying at multiple places! Mostly I go to Al-Bokhari Mosque in our neighbourhood because it’s spacious and clean and the Imam’s voice is beautiful mashallah. Below you’ll find a list of Jeddah’s famous Mosques and their Imams. I don’t know if this is 100% accurate though. 

الشيخ هاني الرفاعي …. مسجد العناني جنوب غرب قصر السلام بجدة
الشيخ نبيل الرفاعي ….. مسجد التقوى شارع التحليه بجوار مجرى السيل بجدة
الشيخ توفيق الصايغ ……مسجد اللامي شارع التحلية بجدة
الشيخ عادل ريان …… مسجد أم الخير الصفا بجوار متاجر وطني بجدة
الشيخ عبدلله بصفر …… مسجد الشعيبي السلامه بجدة
الشيوخ عبدالعزيز الزهراني و علي العجمي …..مسجد خادم الحرمين الشريفين غرب دوار الكره الارضية بجدة
محمد يوسف …. مسجد الاميرمتعب ـ بحي الجامعة بجدة
‏الشيخ سهل ياسين…..جامع الأمير سلطان بحي الشاطئ بجدة
الشيخ شيخ أبوبكر الشاطري ……جامع التقوى بحي النسيم بجدة
الشيخ علاء المزجاجي ……مسجد تجار جدة في شارع التحلية بجدة
‏الشيخ عبدالباسط المرزوقي …….جامع عمر بن الخطاب بحي الصفا بجدة
عبدالعزيز الحكمي …… مسجد ابي ذر المطار القديم جدة

Finally, I leave you with Shaikh Saud Al-Shuraim‘s reciting of Surat Al-Baqarah during Taraweeh Prayer at Al-Masjid Al-Haram in Makkah a few years ago.

Black Coffee

I drink my coffee in the morning
Black and bitter like everything else in my life is
Outside my window, rain is pouring
Raindrops are salty tears I’m too familiar with
 
I stand naked underneath the shower
Everyday I pray I will finally feel unstained and clean
But there’s simply not enough water
To wash away the blood, tears, memories and all that’s between
 
I hold my breath for as long as I can
Am I strong enough to fight my instinct to survive?
I breathe in against my will and I don’t understand
How can one be not dead but far away from being alive?

Ramadan and Noor… what’s next for Arabic TV channels?

As all of you probably know, the Turkish series Noor along side its cousin Sanawat Aldya3 have come to an end just before Ramadan. I have refrained from talking about these shows because everyone has talked about them and well, I don’t want to repeat the same points again. Now that it’s over, I can honestly say that I thought they were of the worst shows to ever air on TV! I only watched a couple of episodes out of interest and had to sit through a horrible few others while I was stuck at a relative’s or friend’s house. The plot is very ridiculous and the acting is extremely immature. The directing is average at best and the so called attractive Noor, Mohannad and Lamees (if I remembered correctly) are not good looking in my opinion but then beauty is in the eye of the beholder. As if to why would anyone watch those shows and how did they come to be so popular, well the most sensible answer was out of boredom because no other reason sounds logical to me. A friend of mine who’s half Turkish swears to me that no one in Turkey bothered to watch the show when it first aired in its mother country! So what’s the deal then? Are we smarter than Turkish people that we have witnessed those jewels of TV shows and they didn’t? Are we a romance-deprived nation as many writers blame for being the reason for watching such shows? Is it because the average looking actors are better looking than our average Saudi?! It all comes down to this, it was a stupid show and I have no idea why anyone watched it. Thank God it ended. MBC was the smartest and the biggest winner of all by marketing this show.

Moving on to another pressing matter, Ramadan TV. Every year all TV channels work their hardest to create an unbelievable amount of TV shows for this holy month. I have read somewhere that Egyptian TV was the one started the trend more than a decade ago by its Fawazeer Ramadan shows. The truth is, somewhere along the line, probably due to good marketing and lack of public awareness, Ramadan has turned into the month of TV and food rather than the holy month of worship. The major players now are MBC, Dubai TV and Abu Dhabi TV. Rotana Khalijia is trying to break into the market and well Orbit channels are always struggling but then who really watches Orbit anymore? Of course the other TV channels all are trying to win a portion of the big pie that is advertisement money paid by food and beverage companies for the ad slots within the popular shows. Saudi TV has basically lost the race when it’s one popular show Tash Ma Tash was sold to MBC in 2005 and now has stopped airing all together.

So what is the formula for any TV channel during Ramadan? I’ll break it to you in case you want to start your own channel. First of all you must have the Historical Series, something that takes place back in the days of Abo Ja’afar Almansoor or Haroon Alrasheed. Then you’d have to have the Bedouin Series, something that is filled with meaningless poetry and many horses and the occasional tribal fight. After that you have to include the Syrian Drama series which is basically nothing except for macho Syrian men yelling at one another in the midst of social issues. The Kuwaiti Series is of course a regular on all channels and this is the most colorful one because it must have at least and not limited to, women in their full make up at the early morning hours, the drunken father, the beaten down mother, the drug addict cousin, the old man who dies of a heart attack, the young boy who gets in an accident, the love affair that never works and the evil man who ruins everyone’s lives. Don’t forget to add some beating and wailing to that mix. Then you’d have to make space for the Khaliji Sitcom Wannabe that always fails to be funny. The Egyptian Drama Series is of course compulsory but the only good thing about it that its’ usually variant unlike the other types of shows that repeat the same things. The blood boiling Hidden Camera Show should never be forgotten. The cameraman has to get beaten a few times by a couple of angry people. Oh yeah! The purely idiotic game show that just throws money at people in order to make more money by calls and ads! Last but not least, the Religious Show in order to satisfy the more conservative market. Better if you could attract a famous Shaikh or Islamic Personality to the show.

That ladies and gentlemen concludes today’s lessons of How to Create Your Own TV Channel in Ramadan! May you enjoy a happy Ramadan filled with spirituality and good deeds.

PS. There’s a list sent by email that contains most of the TV shows schedules including Time, Channel and Reruns. It’s extensive to the degree that you’d have nothing else to do if you wanted to watch them all, In fact, you’ll miss a few each day! Hint: watch whatever show you want AFTER Ramadan. The good ones get reruns then ;) Use this month to make amends for all your sins during the year!